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Tracking the Tempest Revisions Diary: Day 3

So I had to do what must be the most painful thing possible in revisions: I had to cut a whole storyline, which meant I had to cut MY FAVORITE CHAPTER. 

Why do I love the chapter? It’s pure fun. It also has a character that I adore, and that only appears in this one scene. The chapter also has some of the best lines, I think, in the novel.  

But it had to go.  Why? Because my editor asked me a question about why a certain character was in a certain place, and I couldn’t think of an answer. My motivation was that I’d raised an issue in Tempest Rising that I wanted to address, here. The problem, however, was that the entire time I’d been writing, I knew I was making compromises in the book’s logic in order to get Jane interacting with this certain character in this certain place.

I learned doing my thesis how much I can lie to myself. I learned that if I like an idea or a source or a particular line, I will wedge it in, come hell or high water. I will assure myself that, whatever it is, it fits, and then I wait for my supervisor, at that time, and now, at this time, my editor, to tell me it’s okay. Which, of course, they never do. I’m not trying to be perverse. I’m not thinking to myself, “Ha! I will slide this one past them and they will never notice!” But I think that, subconsciously, that is exactly what I’m trying to do. I want them to read it and reassure me that it is GENIUS, rather than a mistake. Even though I know, in my bones, that it is, indeed, a problem.

I really wanted Jane to interact with this character and to be taken around this character’s world. So I wedged the storyline in, even though doing so forced me to make rather ridiculous connections and to insist Jane would be places it really didn’t make sense for her to be.

Until, of course, my editor asked me why and I couldn’t lie to myself anymore. Now I’m cutting the whole shebang. I’m not deleting it, mind you. It will always be in the folder called “Tracking the Tempest Draft 3,” and the underlying issue at the core of these scenes is still in place in the series. And, eventually, this character’s backstory will need to be addressed. But not in this book, and not now.

The big chop hurt; it really did. But once the decision to excise the story line was made, it was a huge relief. I know the book will be stronger, and that these deleted scenes will be recycled somewhere else, where they’ll shine rather than hinder.

So my lesson for today, boys and girls, is that you shouldn’t be afraid of the big chop. Just like with lopping off your hair, it can be liberating. And you can always grow it back. ;-)

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Tracking the Tempest Revisions Diary: Day 2

Today I’m expanding my new rough outline for my second novel. I’m still leaving it big and rough and loose; I don’t want to invest too much time in it in case the editor pooh-poohs my course of action.

After I get the outline onto Pages, I’m going to tackle the more important task for today, which is answering the specific questions outlined by my editor in her letter. They were questions about motivation, especially character motivation, and structure. 

When I say “answer” these questions, I don’t mean arguing with my editrix extraordinaire that everything she thinks is missing is actually there, somewhere. As I tell my students, it doesn’t matter what you think is on the page, it’s what the reader gets from the page. Not from you; from the page. It’s hard to make that leap into understanding that the essay in your brain isn’t the one on the piece of paper in front of you, and that you have to step back and read it as a stranger would. All of a sudden, when they succeed in this step, my students notice all the lack of specification, the naked “thiss” and “thats,” the weird word choices that made so much sense in their own head, but are actually misleading.

Anyway, this happens in my fiction, but in more hippy dippy ways. I know Jane like I know my left arm. I adore the chick. Seriously. So I find that in this second book (as I did in my first and as I’m trying, really hard, not to do in my third) I don’t really feel like I have to go into her head too much. After all, it’s Jane, and we all know Jane, right? 

Obviously, the answer to that is “wrong.” I know Jane; readers are getting to know Jane. And it’s my job to make the introductions. 

So what I meant by “answering” my editor’s questions is more about reiterating, for myself, what I want a certain structure to accomplish, or what I want a certain character’s motivations to be. And then making some connections between what I want and how I’m going to do it. For example, explanations such as, “scene A will help clarify this about Ryu and Jane’s relationship, while scene B will help us understand Anyan a bit better.” That sort of thing.

I have coffee, smoothie, and the whole morning/afternoon to git ‘er done. I’ll let ya know how it goes. 

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Tracking the Tempest Revisions Diary: Day 1

So, today I’ve officially begun revising Tracking the Tempest, Book Two in the Jane True Series. 

Basically what I’m doing for these revisions is completely hacking apart the first third of the book, making significant changes to the second third, and leaving the final third pretty much intact, minus obvious continuity changes I will have to make.

The reason I’m changing the first third is because it sucks. It’s slow, and it’s just not the right way to hit any kind of stride. That said, when I first realized that major surgery was what I needed to do to get Tracking up to snuff, I felt that initial surge of pure dauntification I always get when I’m embarking on major edits.

But the good thing about having done my PhD., and about having written, for all intents and purposes, three different theses for my different supervisors, is that the daunt only lasts a wee while, and then I’m able to git to steppin’.

Because any writing project, whether it’s an essay, a thesis, or a novel, is like a verbal game of Tetris. As I’m doing my rough draft, the ideas are (hopefully) flowing thick and fast. I gotta get them out, and tuck them into a position, before I lose my mojo. But the nice thing about this game of Tetris is that editing gives me a “do over” function. I get to step back, and rearrange whatever I like. So I have learned to think of editing less as a torturous process of correction, and more as an opportunity for expansion, growth, and thought. I’m no longer under that strain to just get it out; I have time to play, to enjoy, and to develop.

So what I did today was I started shifting around my outline. I’m making sure I nail down the major flow of action, making just a few notes regarding different opportunities for character development that these structural changes will allow. I’m just using a pen, paper, and shorthand, for now.

Tomorrow, I will sit down and put it onto the computer, padding it a bit more and giving it some more thought. The key at this stage of the process is, for me, to force myself to slow it down and really think it through. I am very OCD about deadlines, and I would prefer to get things in early (and by early, I mean immediately), than to take the full deadline and really explore. But I’m going to try to engage with my options a bit more, with these rewrites. I think I know what I want to do, and it appears to be pretty obvious, but I want to make sure I give Jane as much space as she needs to grow. She’s such a great gal, and I hate the thought that my own haste might overshadow her cool. So I’m going to be patient (which is not my virtue) and I’m going to be thorough. 

Or at least I’m going to try.

Then, on Sunday or Monday, when I’ve got the new outline on file, I’ll send it to my editor and we’ll have a good conversation/brainstorm together.

When we’re agreed on my course of action, I’ll start rewriting. My revisions for the second book aren’t due till July 15th, but I want to get as close to completing them as I can (and hopefully have a rough complete) done by June 1st. The reason for this is that I want to get a big chunk of the third book written in June, taking into account the changes I’m making in the second book. Then, starting July 1st, I’ll go back to Tracking for a final polish up of the edits, this time taking into account what I’m doing in Book 3.  

And hopefully that’s going to mean that Tracking the Tempest is tight with both Tempest Rising and Tempest’s Legacy. 

This is the plan, Stan. I’ll keep you updated on how it goes.

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World Building 101: a Redux

So, here’s the blog post I said I’d write about what happened at my world building workshop. But first I want to set up why I did this workshop and how it became something a little different from what I’d originally assumed it would be.  

I’d been asked to do a presentation ages ago by LSUS’s Write On group, and I’d been like, “Yeah, sure! I’ll figure out a topic later!” I’d thought of doing a big power point with pictures of my agency and my publishing company that I was going to take when I went to NYC in March. The problem with that plan was a) I forgot to take pictures and b) I can’t work power point.

So I was greatly relieved when the estimable Jaye Wells and Mark Henry, two UF authors extraordinaire and fellow Leaguers, invited me to help them wrangle a workshop down in Dallas on World Building. I was like, “Sweet! I can just steal their thunder! Like some ancient Greek demigod!” I do hope they don’t plan on chaining me to a rock where something eats my entrails for eternity. You wouldn’t do that to me, would you, guys? Right?

Anyway, the problem with me stealing their idea was that I didn’t know what World Building was. Again, for those of you who’ve stumbled upon me, I, in my turn, have stumbled upon being a writer. I have written and read all my life, but not in order to become an author of Urban Fantasy. I did it to become an Academic as I enjoy a good mortarboard and am a total masochist.  

So I went to the workshop and learned as much as everybody else did. But the funny, if inevitable thing, I learned was that I had totally world built, I just didn’t know the lingo. As I was researching Tempest Rising, I researched all the things you have to research to world build, and I had tons of pictures saved on my desktop that I could stare at for inspiration. I just didn’t know that  what I was doing had a name.

But it made sense to me to do it, at the time, because I was writing about a shit ton of stuff I hadn’t ever seen or done before. I’m not magic. I’ve never met a shapeshifter. Rockabill doesn’t exist. I’ve never actually seen the Old Sow. So I had to make it up in my head and, I figured, the more visual cues I had to draw on, the better.

So I knew exactly how I’d run an Urban Fantasy workshop on World Building. I’m a good teacher; it’s a concrete concept I can dig into, so no problem. But, except for one student, no one who was going to attend my workshop wanted to write fantasy. And yet, that didn’t bother me at all. Because I realized, as an urban fantasy writer, how much world building must go into more realistic genres of fiction. After all, the thing I had to research longest, and was most worried about getting “right” wasn’t the genies, or the magical powers, or the magical weapons . . . It was Maine. The “real” world. I can tell my reader that vampires are purple with grey eyes and only one arm coming from the center of their chest, and, if I set it up okay, a reader would have to concede that, in the world of my book, vampires are purple, etc. But Maine exists. People live there. Anyone can google it. If I screwed Maine up, I’d be foobarred.

And then I thought about the worlds of other books that are our world, certainly, but that are not. They are the world of their author; the world of their protagonist. I thought of Portnoy’s Complaint, by Philip Roth, one of my all time favorite books. That book is set in our world, and yet it’s utterly Portnoy’s world. I can see it the way he would see it. I can smell the cooking cabbage, see the glistening sheen on the liver draining on the cutting board, see his own sweat glistening on his forehead as he ponders what he’s just done to the family dinner. Similarly, in Roth’s Sabbath’s Theater, Mickey gazes at the carefully laid out gourmet breakfast spread that his well-off hosts have left for him on their kitchen table. It is just a collection of jams and pastries and cereals, and one pre-segmented grapefruit-half wrapped in cellophane, but Mickey sees the poignant, and ultimately fruitless, detritus of a wealthy man’s attempt to gain immortality and peace through Healthy Living. It is just a single image of a breakfast table, but it’s also a still life, a tableau of modernity that slices away the layers of our domestic comforts to give Roth’s reader an indication not only of our own human condition but of Mickey’s condition. We helplessly see what Mickey must helplessly see at all times, all around him: the proof that we must die and that we must live fearing our own death, the condition which Roth calls our human stain.

So we all world build, to some extent. I know that an author like Philip Roth has never, outside of kindergarten, sat with a bunch of magazines and cut them up in order to make a montage. But he’s still world building.  Since he’s a genius, he gets to skip a few steps. But I need all the help I can get, so pass the scissors and glue.

On that note, when I went into the workshop I went armed with a bunch of magazines, some scissors, and the handout you see in the preceding blog post. I introduced the topic, just as I did in the handout, and then I instructed the class to cut out a single image from their magazines that fit with their current project or, if they didn’t have a project, fit with their visual understanding of a favorite book.

Everyone got really into it, and came up with some really great pictures. The student who’s working on a UF idea found a shampoo add with a woman who has flowers for hair. He thought it was a great idea for one of his fairy characters, and we all wholeheartedly agreed. 

Another student is working on a series of short stories about a family’s holiday. She picked out this postcard perfect photo of a beautiful home, covered in snow, that looked like something Thomas Kinkade would paint. When it came time to explain why that image reached out to her, she explained that the matriarch of this family was cold and forbidding and perfect, and that everyone dreaded these family holidays. So I latched onto the eery perfection of the house, with its snow sprinkled all over it in perfect waves as if even Nature was afraid of upsetting the woman who lived there. And my student mentioned these things, but she also brought up the lights in the windows, explaining how they represented, for her, how there was warmth and love at the center of this family, despite all the surface dysfunction. It was a wonderfully symbolic little tableau of a tense, but ultimately loving, family dynamic.

In a final example, another student of mine is working on a fictionalized memoir of her own family. Rooted in the deep south, the work will span pre- and post-Civil War themes. This student latched onto an image from a Marks and Spencer’s add, which had a really beautiful woman in a beautiful long dress sitting in a sumptuous boudoir. My student talked about how the dress, especially all the detail at the bottom of the very fancy skirt, reminded her of the antebellum South. I used this as a great example of how you can take an expected image – the finery of the antebellum Southern Belle – and make it unexpected, and more symbolic. A skirt like that would have gotten dirty very quickly, one would imagine, around the sweeping expanse of its hem. The intricate beading would have brought the spectator’s gaze downward, over all that intricate beauty, to a thin crust of dirt along the very bottom hem. Symbolically, this dirt would represent what bought such finery (slave labor), but also what the entire Belle system was based upon. After all, imagine being a woman who was honored and lauded as an icon of femininity to be preserved and cherished (at least in popular song), but whose own father and her own husband could, quite possibly, have fathered dozens of bastards by raping slaves? Such beautiful, pampered ladies could have been sired by and married to a rapist, and the physical proof of both their adultery and their barbarism would be embodied in children, slave children, who one has the right to sell at auction. The dresses may have been wicked pretty, and the boudoirs wicked sumptuous, but you don’t gotta be William Faulkner to see that things were seriously rotten at the core of Plantation society. So I used her picture as an example of how you can riff on an image in an unexpected way. Of all the possible images to discuss in the photo, she focused on the skirt, which I thought was interesting. And so I asked, “Why is she focusing on that?” Asking yourself such questions might lead you to your next riff.

All in all it was a great workshop, and I know that I learned a lot, even if nobody else did. I realized how important world building is for everyone, not just sci fi/fantasy writers, and how visual images can help so much with one’s writing, especially with sensory language. People struggle with sensory language, but it’s so much easier if you have something in front of you that you can imagine tasting/touching/smelling. Something of which you can see the colors, and how they swirl together or offset one another or clash.

So world building is, as Martha would say, a good thing! 

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World Building 101

So, I ran a little workshop at my University on Wednesday about World Building.  I’m going to blog about that for my next few posts.  Firstly, I’m going to put up the handout I made for my students.  Then I’ll blog a reaction piece that talks about what happened/what I learned from doing the workshop.  I think it went really well, not least for me, as I’m still sorting out what I “do” when I write and learning how to articulate that in a classroom setting.  Anyway, here’s the handout!

WORLD BUILDING 101

What is World Building?

World building is a term coined in science-fiction writer’s workshops in the 1970’s. In its original sense, world building refers to the act of creating an entirely new (either futuristic or fantastical) world. Such worlds must be coherent, and the writer must articulate every nuance of his or her world, including history, geography, physical and natural laws, culture, society, religion, etc.

That said, every writer world builds. As an urban fantasy writer, I take our world and I give it a little supernatural twist. But even writers who write “realistic” fiction world build. After all, each individual has his or her own unique perspective on life. If I attended a party with a goth, a cheerleader, and a hipster, they would all describe that scene to me from their own particular perspective. 

Therefore, the first thing to focus on is what your world looks like.  In order to do so, I’d like you each to take five minutes looking through magazines to find a picture that, for whatever reason, represents an aspect of your world. If you’re working on a project, use that. If you’ve never even thought of writing a novel, let alone have an idea of what your world would look like, think of your favorite book and imagine you’re directing the movie of that book.

*** Remember, this is JUST AN EXERCISE. Don’t go crazy looking for the perfect picture.

Now take a moment to figure out why that image spoke to you. What are you focusing on? You’ll discover that discussing what you highlight in the photo will be very different from what other people would have focused on. Now try to latch onto an aspect of that photo that you can riff on, or twist, or use as a symbol.

Things you want “embodied” in your novel:

What is the tone of your book?

What is the twist of your book?

What is the nature of your protagonist/antagonist?

Where do they live?

How do they dress?

What might the soundtrack to your world be?

What do you HAVE to have in your book?

I find that getting the tone is the most important thing in building my world. Then I build upward, looking for images that inspire me. Because I write urban fantasy, half of my world (our half) is already built, but I have to establish Jane’s (my protag’s) perspective on that world. Then I have to make-up the second half (the supernatural). And figure out how these two synch.

If you’re NOT writing sc-fi/fantasy, you still want to establish what your book “looks” like.  

Then you build a board, like a storyboard, that has images that inspire you. You can refer back to these images as you write, giving yourself something tangible to focus on and describe. Think of it like painting a still life, but with words. 

Things to include on your board:

Models who look like your characters

Outfits they might wear

Things they may own: cars, weapons, clothes, etc.

Houses/buildings that inspire you

Art that inspires you

Furniture

Pull these images as you come across them. You don’t have to sit down and search, necessarily, but as you find images you can add them to a pile or add them to a board. You never know when you’ll use them. Then paste them together on story boards or if you use your computer, as I tend to, put them in files together. Some people organize my book, by character, by chapter, by scene, by setting . . . do whatever works for you.

Establish the look of your world goes a long way to establishing everything else. If you are a sci-fi/fantasy/paranormal romance/historical romance/etc. writer, you’ll have to do a lot more AFTER this initial step to really define your world. A lot of work goes into such development, and you want to make sure you do it BEFORE you start writing.

If you are writing more “realistic” (yes, I’m THAT po-mo that all traces of the “real” go in quotation marks), than these visual cue boards may be all you need to make before you start writing. But you’ll be surprised at how much they can help you ground your world. Sensory language, an integral part of writing that many writers struggle with, comes very easily if you have an image in front of you waiting to be described. You can imagine stroking your hands over it, smelling it, wearing it, bumping your head against it, and then you can describe how these things would feel/taste/smell, etc. 

In other words, these boards make you remember that, no matter what kind of writer you are, the world surrounding your characters matters. It’s easy to get wrapped up in the thoughts and actions of our characters so that we forget they’re supposed to be “real,” doing “real” things in a “real” world. That’s when we lose our anchors and, therefore, lose our readers.

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On Narcissism and Protagonists

So I’m doing a shit ton of interview questions for Falcata Times, some of which they’ll use in their magazine  and all of which will go up as a FAQ section of this website, eventually.  (I’m halfway through, Gareth, I swear!)  

Falcata Times asked a lot of questions that other people have asked in other forums, or to this blog site when I was looking for questions for the back of Tempest Rising.  One of the most common questions I’ve seen is “Are you like your protagonist?”

I love answering this question.  The short answer is, “No.”  I’m not like Jane at all.  She’s way braver, way nicer, way more confident, in some ways, than I am.  We have some similarities, but any good traits are exacerbated in her and she doesn’t have my bite or my ambition.  I’ve also given her my sense of humor and my english nerdiness, but that’s about it.

So it’s an easy question to answer, in some ways, but there’s more to it than that.  Because I consider my books to be more character driven than is normal for UF.  I mean, there are clear plotlines, and they’re action packed and very UF friendly.  But, like Charlaine Harris’s books, the core of my writing is my characters, and especially my protagonist.  In theory, I think that some really plot-driven UF books could be written with an entirely different protagonist than what’s on offer, and yet the bulk of such books would be the same.  This isn’t a criticism, mind you.  I love the detail of the world-building that are in such books, and I love an action driven, ambitiously plotted read.  But my book isn’t like that.  You couldn’t have Tempest Rising without Jane, in the same way you couldn’t have The Southern Vampire Mysteries without Sookie.  Despite the fact that Alan Ball seems to be doing his best to cut her out.  But that’s neither here nor there.

Anyway, my point is that Jane is the hook of the book.  So when people ask me, “Is she you?”, that question is more loaded than I, at first, realized.  Because Jane IS my book.  And she was so clear to me from the beginning.  I wrote her story, not mine.  And the other series I’m developing has the same sort of tension to it.  My new protagonist is the polar opposite of Jane, in many way, and yet they have some striking similarities.  Especially their capacity for friendship; their loyalty; their self-awareness.  And these are my values; the values that mean most to me and that I esteem above all others.  So maybe both Jane and my new gal are dream versions of me, without all the baggage and neuroses that I cart around like a valet.  This makes them easy to write, in some ways, because I just think in terms of what I should do, or what I would like to do, in a given situation, and then I have them do it.  

So the real challenge, I think, would be to write a character based on my faults, on what I’m ashamed of about myself.  And I know this.  I’ve been aware of this for a while.  My real challenge would be to write a character who is weak where I am weak, rather than strong where I am strong(ish).  

I’ve been mulling over that character for awhile.  I knew one thing about her: she’d be entirely human.  There’d be no secret revelation giving her great powers, or anything.  She’d be human and utterly vulnerable.  She’d also be a bit of a shit.  But it would make sense why she was a bit of a shit.  And she would have some really good traits, to make up for the shitty ones.  

Another hard sell, and keep in mind that I was selling to myself, was that I wanted her shitty traits to be rather non-dramatic.  No nymphomania, no drug addiction, no penchant for pushing over old ladies or toddlers.  She’d just be a bit of a shit in the way that most of us are, if we’re honest, a bit of a shit.

So, basically, I wanted to create a character who was average: an average human who was averagely shitty.  But who would want to read that?  That character would have to be really cohesive for her to work.  And I couldn’t see her.

Then I was on a massage table in Calistoga, a treat  from my oldest and dearest friend, Jana.  I hadn’t actually relaxed since I started Tempest Rising a year ago, I don’t think, until that moment.  And my new character came to me in a flash.  I saw her, standing in front of me, and I knew everything about her.  And she’s awesome.  I love her, warts and all.  Some of them are my warts, some of them are made up warts, and all of the warts have a backstory that is completely fictional.  But she’s AWESOME.

So she’s number 3 on the list of people to write, but she’s higher than that in my estimation.  I’m so excited to breathe life into her, and I can’t wait for the summer break.  I am going to write like I’ve never written before.  I gotta get this stuff out, before I burst.  

Because my protagonists, in the end, aren’t me.  They aren’t even figments of me.  They’re fully formed women nestled under my skin, and they want out.  They want to be born.  I understand Luigi Pirandello, when he says of his Six Characters, “Born alive, they wished to live.”  My girls want to live, too.  So I gotta git to steppin’.

Summer break can’t get here soon enough . . .

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What I Learned From Copyediting

So I just finished reviewing my copyedits from Orbit.  They were great.  Whoever did the copyedits was super thorough, which I really, really appreciate.  I did learn a few things for next time, however.  And I will share them with you, mostly because if I write them anywhere else, I will lose them.  I lose everything for I am a bit batty.

Anyway, here is what I learned from copyediting:

1) I am 30, and in my day (which in MLA years makes me about 400), one was supposed to put two spaces after a period (or full stop for my British readers).  Now it’s only one.  I should have known that.

2) I’m still not certain what to do with ellipses but they seem to involve four, suddenly, and to be tightly spaced.  I’ll have to watch and see what they do with them in the final copy.

3) In future, I need to make a firm decision about what to capitalize and what not to capitalize and be more careful about consistency.  I had capitalized all of my supernatural names, which was dumb, so I made some lower case but not all and . . . disaster ensued.  

4) Never, ever, quote song lyrics.  This was my big gaff.  In academia, we have a very generous fair use policy.  You can quote pretty much anything, at great length, as long as you attribute it properly.  But apparently the music industry sues the pants off anyone who even breathes in a way that might sound at all like an actual lyric.  So I was busy rewriting those scenes, and will never quote lyrics again.  

5) I have also learned I have to learn the Chicago Style Guide.  Dagnabbit.

This is what I learned reviewing my copyedits.  Thanks!

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Developing your Calloused Soul

In Britain, where I did my graduate work, your PhD. thesis culminates in something called your “Defense.”  There’s one person picked from your own university (called an Internal Examiner) and one person picked from outside of your university (called an External Examiner).  They read your thesis and rip it to shreds, until the day comes that you enter a tiny room where they sit facing you.  Then they rip you to shreds.  It’s all done very politely, and, as it is Britain, there is inevitably tea involved.  After they pound you into the dirt, they tell you what you have to fix in your thesis to make it tolerable.  After which, because it’s Britain, they pour booze down your throat.

Sounds like a horrendous experience, no?  It is, in many ways.  But it’s not all that bad because you’re already used to it.  The whole system is built to prepare you for that one day of hell.  So you have a supervisor (or two or three) who approaches every chapter as if it were being submitted for its defense.  In other words, my supervisor would cover each and every submission from me in cuneiform, which, when translated, read things like, “Why?” “How are you defining these terms?” “What does this really mean?”  When he was really exasperated with me, all he could do was pencil an enormous question mark in the margins.

(He’d also write things such as, “flabby,” “loose,” and “awkward,” but he insisted he was talking about my syntax so I didn’t go all old-school on him.) 

I was reminded of this yesterday, when I had a talk with my editor about my sequel, Tracking the Tempest.  It’s not officially being edited, yet, and she was really calling for other things.  But I want to be thinking in terms of edits for Tracking as I write the third book, so I asked her for some feedback.

And it was just like being in my supervisor’s office, again.  Whenever I would sit down in my supervisor’s office and he started in on my work, I would get this feeling that started in my stomach and rolled outwards towards my extremities.  It feels a bit like a hot flash, I imagine.   My gut clenches, and then I feel a palpable wave roll through me that is a combination of heat tinged with anxiety and shame.  Shame that what I did wasn’t good enough, and anxiety that what I can do won’t ever be good enough.  

Then I shake it off.  And then I start to enjoy the dressing down.

Basically, from all my time spent in little academic offices (naturally, my editor called when I was in my own little academic office), I’ve become a masochist.  Seriously.  I was so thrilled to open up my copyedited manuscript of Tempest Rising and see a flood of red.  The manuscript was inundated with little squiggly red lines.  Talk about cuneiform . . . But I couldn’t have been happier.  And I was much, much happier than if I’d been handed back clean sheets of paper.  As it stands, the book is 338 pages right now, with all the extra stuff.  Anyone, no matter how grammatically gifted, will make mistakes in 338 pages.  And I am not that gifted.  So when I saw loads of red, I did have that same initial reaction of shame and terror.  Then I shook it off, looking through what the copyeditor had done, and I wanted to make out with her.  She’s a genius.  She read my work so carefully, and caught so many things.  I want to fall at her feet and promise her my unborn children.  

And that’s how I felt after I talked to Devi.  After I shake off that first hot flush of disappointment in myself, I get soooo into it.  And then I think how lucky I am to have such a good editor who cares about Jane as much as I do and doesn’t want to see me fuck up her story.  Better than that, my editor’s not afraid to articulate exactly where I went wrong.  Just like my supervisors at the University of Edinburgh, she says, “Now, I want you to know that there was a lot here that was good, and I liked it.  BUT . . .” and then she proceeds to shred it like lettuce.  And I take every glorious blow as if they were rained down from heaven.

Because readers are going to do far worse.  They don’t have an investment in me, they don’t want to see me succeed.  They’re certainly not my enemies, but neither do I have them in my contact’s list.  When they say, “I thought Jane did this or that,” and I meant for Jane to have done something entirely different, I can’t call them or email them and explain what I really meant to write.  What’s on the page is all the reader has to go by, and if I have screwed up somewhere, and not explained something correctly, or let something slide that’s important to the development of the plot or the characters, I have failed.  Not the reader.  Me.

It’s my responsibility to create a coherent story.  It’s my responsibility to anticipate reader reactions and to recognize weak links where they threaten to break everything apart.  It’s my responsibility to take the reader by the hand and guide him or her through the world of Tempest Rising.   

So when I feel that agonizing feeling of failure, the reason it’s instantaneous and not debilitating is that I know, from years of experience getting pummeled by the powers that be, that these are the questions that strengthen my writing.  I recognize that I am lucky to have people who care enough about me and Jane to invest themselves in my imagination.  I can’t add a disclaimer to the front of a book, reading, “Dear Sir or Madame: Please shut off your brain while you read this and accept everything I say.”  Readers will question, readers will recognize weakness, and readers will react to that weakness.  I’m a reader, too.  Moreover, I’m a reader who makes a living reacting to the weaknesses and strengths of writers a hell of a lot more talented and intelligent than I am.

So I need all the help I can get.  And that’s what my editor, my agent, my Alpha Team, my copyeditor (whoever you are), and everyone else who takes a divot out of Tempest Rising does . . . they help me.  And I want to thank them, with all my heart.  And I know Jane thanks you, too.  She’s lucky to have all of you.

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On Word Counts and Dropping F-Bombs

So last night we had a cocktail party with a few old friends and some of my new friends at McIntosh & Otis and Orbit.   It was insanely fun.  My old friends were incredible and it was so good to see them.  And my new friends were exactly as I’d new they’d be.  Awesome and hilarious.  My kidneys hurt from the laughing.  And yes, we managed to preface most things with “the” for the entire night.  Which I thoroughly enjoy.  Pictures will go up soon on facebook.  

Anyway, two exceptionally funny things occurred (amongst many funny things), the first being a picture taken of me by my friend Kristin.  Our friend Greg and his wife, Susan, are both VERY TALL.  I mean TALLLLLLL.  Kristin and Sam are tall, but Greg and Susan are TALLLLLLL.  Meanwhile, I am very, very, short.  Greg had brought this preposterously tall hat (the theme of the party was oversized accessories, although I made mine into overpriced accessories in honor of my recent, beloved purchases) which made him EVEN TALLER.  So they thought it would be hi-larious to stick me in the hat, next to Greg and take a picture.  It’s one of the funnier things I’ve ever seen, not least because I’m 5’2″ and Greg is 6’4″, but on top of that already ridiculous discrepancy, Kristin somehow foreshortened the photo so that Greg has no head and (hat and all) I just come up to like mid-way on his chest.  PLUS I’m somehow smooshed in the frame so I look like a dwarf.  It’s amazing, and as I love self-deprecation, I’ll totally post it on facebook soon.

The other funny thing was the language in that room.  Holy moly, it would have made a pirate’s eyes water.  And most of it came from me and Devi, my editor.  We were like bombers during the Blitz with the f-bombs.  We were founts of foul language.  It was breathtaking.  That said, Greg was dropping f-nukes, but he’s large and it’s probably more expected than when the tiny women start cobbling together dirty bombs using only English.

Which made me think about language and then I remembered I wanted to talk about the issue of word counts.  A lot of people work by setting word count expectations for themselves, but I don’t.  I work by chapter, which – as my chapters are inevitably about the same length – I guess means I could call it word count.  But I like to think of it as working by chapter, and I’ll tell you why.  

One of the things I always talk about in my freshman comp classes is the idea that each paragraph in their short essays is like a little universe.  It must be complete, on its own, but it must also balance out with the other stars that make up its galaxy.  In a novel, this is how I think of my chapters.  Each chapter should, without exception, be written so that if it were plucked from my work and read out of context it will still make sense.  Okay, there will be questions about exact details, but a reader should be able to summarize the chapter, its purpose, and imagine “where” it might be on a plot arc.  

So I try to write a chapter in one or two sittings.  That way I don’t lose either the rhythm of the chapter or my intentions for the chapter.  Then I start editing that chapter.  I polish it up to a fairly decent standard, upon which I send it to Dr. James Clawson, who is one of my Alpha Readers.  He reads everything chapter by chapter, raising issues and flogging grammar.  Once I have a few chapters done like this, I send them to Christie Ko, my other Alpha Reader.  She looks for continuity, proofreads, and gives me new ideas for stuff.  Last, but certainly not least, it goes to Judy Bunch, my former high school English teacher.  She is not a reader of UF, and she’s a grammar fascist, so she’s a perfect reader.  She raises the questions that non-nerds would need answered and can wield a semi-colon like a stiletto.  

So by the time I have a rough draft, it’s actually been edited, piecemeal, quite a bit.  Which means the second and third drafting processes are a bit shorter, even if the initial writing of the rough draft is a bit longer.  

I don’t know if it’s the best way to do things, but it’s what I do.  I’m learning so much as I go.  I never intended to be this type of writer and I don’t know “the craft,” as it were.  I just know what worked for me the first time and my dad always raised me to believe that if it ain’t broke, don’t fix it.  

That said, I’m making adjustments.  I know I don’t have to outline quite as pedantically as I did for the first book.  That things will come and that I end up making changes – adding stuff, taking things out, and getting inspired by ideas – as I go along.  Maybe in four books I’ll have a totally different process.  But right now this is what I do, and I’m sticking to it.  

And on that note, I gotta get to steppin’ and do some writing.  Ciao for now.

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Un Pocito de Nada

This is sort of a Status Update.

So I’m about halfway done with my outline, and I’ve done lots of brainstorming over the weekend.  I discovered with my second book that I had to outline less pedantically than I did with my third.  I am getting better at this whole writing thing, it appears.  Either that or I am simply getting lazier.  

I also discovered with Tracking that I do less erasing if I have a more skeletal outline that I continue filling in as I write.  One of the things that people keep saying when I talk about my obsessive outlining (I’ll outline you if you sit still long enough) is that things end up changing, anyway, so why outline?

Which is very true, but also, for me and my intentions for my series, all the more reason to outline.  I have a big series planned – six books in total – and I know where I want each of them to end up.  There’s LOTS of small to medium-sized spaces for wiggle room, but the big stuff is sewn up already.  And I don’t want to lose that.  So I find that having the big stuff already in place (there’s four or five things that HAVE to happen in this book; doesn’t matter where, too much, and I’m only now figuring out how; but they HAVE to happen) helps me keep The Big Stuff in mind as I flesh out the rest.

And that’s the “rest” that is more malleable; that I’m able to play with.  Which is where the “Socratic” dialogue comes in.  It’s also where you start playing with the genre.  After all, my UF is loosely based (right now) on the crime or mystery genre.  This is the book where it shifts into something a bit different.  But the first two books, and this one, are sort of “who/whydunnits.”  So a lot of my questions to myself are about genre.  ”What would happen in a ‘normal’ crime drama to resolve this situation?  How can I UF that?  Would it work better if I didn’t?  What might a reader expect?  Should I give it to him or her, or should I upset their expectations?”

Another big change in this book is that Jane has very much been the Watson in the first two novels.  She’s not the initiator, not the aggressor.  She’s new to this world, and relatively weak in the first two books.  We’re seeing a very different Jane in the third book.  She’s been training and she’s feeling her magical oats.  I need to make this transformation believable so I really need to get in Jane’s head.  But it’s such a pleasure to do so.  The coolest/weirdest (and possibly more than a little crazy) thing that I’ve discovered about the writing process is how much I love my characters.  Seriously, starting this new book feels like my good friends are suddenly back in town and we get to play.  I enjoy spending time with them.  I want to know what they’ve been up to since I last talked to them (It’s been a whole year in their world!).  I want to find out how they’re doing; how they’ve changed.  I can’t wait to see what they do over the course of this next adventure.   Because they do always surprise me.  The ending of Tracking?  NEVER saw it coming.  And it rocks, btw.  Even my editor was like, “OMG, I had no idea that was going to happen.”  

So that’s where I’m at.  I am outlining; but more comfortable with a more bare bones approach.  I am SO EXCITED about this book, and the plot (at the moment) is coming along very easily.  I’m also introducing some VERY exciting new ladyfriends in this book, who I hope you’ll see a LOT more of.  A LOT more.  They rock.  

I also came up with a new goodie, who’s AWESOME and inspired by a “new” myth no less, as well as a new baddie, who is super creepie.  Super.  Creepie.  

I think that’s about all that’s exciting.  But I’ll keep ya’ll posted.  Any questions?  Just ask!  Any comments?  Fire away!

Thanks!

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